Preface-one

• Artist: T A S T Y Y
• Description: This Might Be The Preface Of A Book I Might Write.
  A Small Novel.
  It's Not Done, And Has Much Editing To Be Done.
  The Plot Is Not Complete, So May Take Awhile To Get A Better Preface, And Chapter One Of My Book Out
  Please Note This IS a rough Draft.
  Thank You And I Hope You Enjoy It.
• Date: 10/07/2008
• Tags: preface book wolf family

...The Sound Of The Wind, it felt Like Pixies Across My Face, Blowing My Hair In The Wind.
The Sound Of The Stream.
My Evil Smile.
It Didn't make any sense.
Their They Were.
My Loved Ones.
My Mother, My Two Sisters, And My Brother.
The Ones I Cared Deeply About.
I Looked Into The Stream, That Separated Myself From My Dear Family.
I Was Smiling.
My Eyes, Not There Normal Blue, But Pure White.
No Color.
No Pupils.
'Attack' I Whispered Slowly.
A Deep Howl From About Two Miles Away Sounded.
I Laughed.
They Were Going To Die.
My Family, Loved Ones, And I Was Laughing.
WAIT I Wanted To Yell, But Couldn't.
Just Smile.
I Could Now Hear The Pounding Foot Steps Of A Wolf.
The One I Had Called.
The One That Would Hurt Them, My Family.
The Wolf Was Dark Brown, And It Shimmered As He Leaped Toward My Family.


Then I Woke Up,
From The Same Dream.

Comments

[T A S T Y Y]

sorry, was in a hurry

[Dezolis]

i dislike how you capitalize every word... >.>

[T A S T Y Y]

Um...It Is Not A Poem, Its Going To Be The Preface Of I Novel I Might Write. but thank you for your words ^-^;;

[The_Musical_Soldier]

Keeping in mind this is a rough draft, I just hope you put the actual story into paragraphs for I can see a story blooming. My advice, don't write poetry about something you haven't experience or resemblance to something you've experienced for it really shows in poems, it truly does. 3/5

[The_Musical_Soldier]

First of fall, this should be listed under Poems for that is exactly what this is. I don't know, it is a good Hollywood trailer for a book but I wish everyone would step away from Hollywood's style. I don't know, it really isn't fair for me to judge poetry really. The details are there, there is just...something missing. Feeling wasn't placed into this poem, I could tell that you weren't really into writing this, as if you were forced to write this poem or something.

[T A S T Y Y]

I Have Gotten A Better Preface (though, i may make a preface-three) and a better plot, i will get preface-two out tomorrow and hopefully a chapter one-rough draft out, and i thank you!

[T A S T Y Y]

PS: I Like Comments. :3