After

• Artist: Ninjutsuninja
• Description: Failed relationship + angry death metal = my first (and most likely last) attempt at relatively emo poetry xD
  
  Hope you guys like it! I consider it one of my better works ^_^
• Date: 07/15/2008
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Floating through nothing
Choking on everything
Dead but still breathing
Blind but still blinking
Heart beats but nothing flows

Ripped from life
Ripped from joy
Ripped from love

Images cloud
Remembrances of unending pain
The skin remembers too
Remembers what was once felt
Denial is a cruel narcotic

Voices echo in a jaded alto
“What happened to you?
Tell us, for we are bored.”

A laugh
A sigh
A concession

“I once chased the golden apple,
I pursued the forbidden fruit,
I wanted what was
No man’s right to taste.

I sailed the waves
In calm and in storm
No rock or wind would impede my quest
I would be the one

Blood
Fears
Sweat
Tears
A draught tasted
By those who dare
I dared
I dared drink the draught
I dared drink deep
What I wasn’t welcome to keep

I found the golden apple
Oh lucky me
But what else I found was a sight to see
A rattlesnake with hair of flames
His forked tongue wrapped around the apple

My apple
My golden apple

Eyes burned
Stomach churned
Darkness fell
Here I am in hell.”

Comments

[Priestess Arianna]

I like this quite a bit. Same as Kashikoi, I've never felt this before, but your poem almost makes me feel as if I have. Very well written. Most of the poems I read on here are very shallow, but this sticks out. (:

[Kashikoi_ichi]

I haven't commented before in the arenas, but I feel the complusion to now as I've finished reading your poem. It's very well written and though I've not experienced this kind of emotion before, your words make me feel as if I have. Very well done.

[Atheshya]

This is emo? I don't think so - this is AMAZING. Great writing, some really good imagery, and it's also dark. In other words, everything I look for in poetry. <3
I rarely give a full five stars, but this deserves it. And a favourite.

[Ciel Rose]

Wow, lovely writing ^^