Falling Souls

• Artist: -Dark-Light_Memmories-
• Description: no description
• Date: 10/08/2008
• Tags: falling souls

The souls from heaven are falling
They go down into hell
Did god give up
Why would he let this happen

No hes bringing them back up
God will never give up the fight

Its still raining souls
They scream and shout

We run and hide
No one wants to help them
How can we

Maybe a simple prayer would help them
The souls are falling into hell
They cry and scream for help
Help them
Pray that they go to heaven

Will you let them suffer
Or will you help them

Look at all the souls
Falling to the depts of hell
They need help
Falling from the sky
Its there rain of white

Snow in the summer
Odd isnt it
The souls have granted us that
So we should help them get back to heaven
Right

Or are you heartless
Like me
Falling from the sky
Are the souls from heaven

Comments

[Death for Wonderland]

It's interesting, very repetitive in my opinion. But I like it 4/5
http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/poetry-and-lyrics/vote/?entry_id=101030379
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[Summer Fallwinterspring]

Ah . . . and the infalliable Autumn takes on religion. Well, I think perhaps I'll give you honest critiques this time, rather than just yell at you. I need to redo my writing credit every once in a while. I don't understand your intent? At first I thought you meant that someone had taken YOU from heaven to hell, but then you started talking about God, so maybe you'd been betrayed by god (har!) but then you talk about YOUR running and hiding. So, do you want to help people who are in trouble?

[Summer Fallwinterspring]

Is that it?

You overuse "hell," "falling," "scream," "heaven."

Wait . . . the souls granted snow in summer . . . I may be missing something here . . . is that a metaphor for something? I don't get it.

Also, and I can't say this enough, PROOFREAD YOUR WORK.

(OH! I just remembered who you remind me of. Tara, the My Immortal author! THAT'S her!)

[Hekibel]

That's really cool.... I like it! 5'd!