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- | Submitted on 04/28/2011 |
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- Title: Him
- Artist: An intelligent human
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Description:
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He got the wrong letter
It spoke of her death
His heart fell clean out
He had nothing left
The war claimed his life
She was duly informed
Heartbroken at home
Forever she mourns
Now bound to death place
With sore broken hearts
They’re stuck in this world
Forever apart
This is part of a couple entry
To see her, click the himandher tag below - Date: 04/28/2011
- Tags: himandher ghost dead brokenheart
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Comments (7 Comments)
- Blackdragon0228 - 05/09/2011
- Eh. Just dull. Very dull.
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- Pikachew - 05/09/2011
- How can a letter speaking of his loved one's death be "the" wrong letter? What kind of letter does a ghost wait for anyway? His hair. I can't get over how brown and lifelike it is considering he's dead. Hold on. He dies in a war, his loved one is informed, soon she dies, he gets a real life letter that announces her death. Then this ghost, who has no organs, loses his heart. . . *explodes*
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- Monopoly on Truth - 05/09/2011
- *vomits* Utter s**t, nothing positive about it.
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- Kitten BeII - 05/09/2011
- Ugh. -_-
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- Ariel Yardena Davidson - 05/09/2011
- Neither of you deserved ORIGINAL critiques - you were essentially the same avatars in concept. Both extraordinarily boring. i'm rather glad the three above you placed higher than you.
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- Desthild - 05/09/2011
- Congratulations!, is really unique and simple. wink
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- An intelligent human - 05/09/2011
- She already pointed out the flaw in that thinking m'dear, also ironic how you accuse two things of being boring with exactly the same wording, not enough creativity to individually criticize? xD
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