Pain

• Artist: I_wuv_u_nots
• Description: i wrote this poem about how pain can sometimes be overwhelming
• Date: 07/17/2008
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This pain that I feel
What is it I've never felt this way before
I'm scared
I wish someone would come and help me
But no one does they are frightned of me
but why
what should I do
No one will come near me
am i turning into something
or am i just different
I can't stand this pain anymore
all my friends hate me
my life is nothing now
I have no use for it anymore

Comments

[I_wuv_u_nots]

OK THINKS FOR THE TIP AND I AM NOT A BEGGINER EITHER I'VE BEEN WRITING POEMS SINCE 5TH GRADE LOL

[On Frail Wings Of Vanity]

You didn't have to say "All my friends hate me". You could try something like "My loved ones have no taste in me" or something that isn't. . . kindergarten-ish. There is typos, and I'm guessing that you are a beginner. You have a good idea for a poem, although this topic is talked about way too much. Some work, practice and a guide to writing poetry should help.

[rikuanddaisuke]

I liked it, reminded me a bit of stuff I used to do, couple spelling mistakes, but I like that it doesn't rhyme, its different and its REALLY good

[I_wuv_u_nots]

once u vote plzz comment and tell meh wat u think