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You were my best freind
untill that day
I saw those bodies
and were they lay
the blood on the floor
handprints on the door
the clothes that you wore
all covered in gore
why did you kill them
my family
after all we were best freinds
you and me
- Title: betrayal
- Artist: MAXpillar
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- Date: 07/24/2008
- Tags: betrayal dissapointment deathblood bloodlust freinds
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Grind Mutant - 07/25/2008
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Most of your poems try to describe violence, I suggest broadening your range and double-checking your work. You used the wrong form of 'where'.
And the last stanza is weakly written. I would go back and change the last stanza to make the sentences flow a little better. - Report As Spam
- Angry emo_panda - 07/25/2008
- oo i like this one better reminds me of naruto. i give u a 5[2nd lol i can't resist]
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- Queen Thumbelina - 07/24/2008
- Is it Sasuke?
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