In Need Of A Good Title..

• Artist: WHOAR g a s m
• Description: I was motivated to write another poem after reading some entries here.I haven't written one in about 6 months so it's not the best.With all my poetry,its good at the beginning and then sinks towards the end,but I cant seem to stop myself with a short poem.To me this one is almost about someone reaching out and giving another person guidance.I hope you's like:]I tend to fix up my poems here and there,so constructive critisism is gladly welcomed:3[I want to add another stanza before the last one]
• Date: 07/28/2008
• Tags: hope life guidance

I hear your footsteps,
My name you're calling.
You've come to find me,
And stop my falling.

You have come closer,
You see my face.
Outstretch your arms,
For loving embrace.

Your eyes show confidence,
Mine hidden by despair.
I want you to take me,
And handle with care.

I want you to show me,
What I need to see.
I wish for your guidance,
To help me be free.

I want you to help me,
Kickstart my emotions.
I want you to teach me to cope,
When my shoulders weigh in tons.

I want to know of our world,
Above and beyond.
Introduce me to others,
As I can learn to grow fond.

I hope you will listen,
For I need to say.
That without you beside me,
I would have not found my way.

Comments

[Nukeor]

woah that is petty awsome, i came in 2nd place in writting poetry. if u had compete you would have made in 1st place.

[Xx_Shedo Santori_xX]

that's really good. A title could be Loving Embrace