dipped in steel

• Artist: xTheWiltedRosex
• Description:
• Date: 10/13/2008
• Tags: sorrow

Shattered and broken,
Dipped in steel,
I did not know,
I'd become a meal.
My heart was yours,
You took it, no deal.
Shattered and broken,
Dipped in steel.

Comments

[mexicantacos2003]

i guess now that people understand it they will rate it better
i didnt need an explanation but thanks for giving one.
it all starts and ends the same way.
and all you need is the right combination of a few words to describe your feelings.

love it i gave it a 5 because its probably one of the best poems in Gaia...(i mean seriously, have you guys read any GOOD poems besides this one?? if so please share)

[xTheWiltedRosex]

this poem is about an abused and broken heart that was never mended and became shielded from everything. even the good in life.

[lilli1220]

this is ok but what is dipped in steel supposed to represent anything?

[dratina92]

what is the significance of "dipped in steel"?

4/5

[mexicantacos2003]

bery gut.
very awesome nice use of repetition just like the guy before me said.

the only thing i dont like is that i just know someone is gonna rip your style off and call it their own. and that pisses me off.


oh well 5

[Dreamsinner]

I like the repetition, the way you end the poem with the beginning. It seems like the speaker is recollecting his/her shattered dreams or heart and piecing them back together with the steel. But i feel sorrow, because it sounds like the speaker will be jaded forever now.

[lapstreet]

i like it comment on mine urs is really cool seems like feelings broken and never recovered