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• Artist: Kaiuc00
• Description: idk
• Date: 10/25/2008
• Tags: another title

You make me feel again,
you make this heart beat,
you fill this empty soul,
and you always make this face smile.

You drive the animal in me,
you quite the demons in my head,
you heal the man in my soul,
and you alway make this thing work.

Comments

[Taste of a Raindrop]

You did an excellent job on this poem! I would give you 4 stars because of your errors, but I have decided to give you 5 stars because of the content. Fix it up. Here are some things:

The word quite should be quiet. Add an s to make the word always. Personally, I would write it so that the first two lines end with periods. Keep the comma in the third line. For the second stanza, I would do the same thing. Two periods for the first two lines, comma stays for the third. Good work!

[king_snake_in_shadows]

i like it this one is a good poem