Simply Speaking

• Artist: Loads Of Laughter
• Description: Aaaaahhhhh, complicated things which I don't understand. . . I wrote it out though.
  Please comment, very appreciated! :D
• Date: 11/12/2008
• Tags: simply speaking

Simply speaking
I do not know
What this is.

Though it's seeming
As though your feelings show
Exactly what being in love is. . .

I cannot see
Beyond this year
Or if I'll stay in your heart.

But if you want me
Know that I'm still here,
And help us not fall apart,

Please.

Comments

[Raziel Nephilim]

I agree with the two middle stanzas, the very first one isn't central to the poem, unless it explains your felling/emotions at the time. And I don't quite understand the last line before Please, as it applies to this poem, since it sounds like you have or aren't close enough to fall apart.

[Macabre_Words]

I like it. But yeah I agree with Quzo there are alot of love poems out there. Try something different because who knows you might be better at somthing other than love poems! XD Not hard to try something new!

[Quzo]

It's a decent effort but love poems are a bit common I read lots and it's getting a bit boring...

[rayne482]

Nice. Similar to my style, I think.

[zizzlha]

for some reason all the poems and lyrics i'v read so far are about death pain and hatred _3_ it's getting anoying, but i wont mark you down for it 5/5