THE LIGHT

• Artist: El Clown 95
• Description: ITS ME
• Date: 11/30/2008
• Tags: light

FORE I AM THE LIGHT WHEN U SEE ME I U R JOYFUL,HAPPY BUT UR HAPPY WITH ME ONLY WHEN I PUT U IN THE RIGHT DIRECTION BUT U HATE ME THE MINUTE I LEAD U IN THE WRONG DIREACTION UR ANGRY,SAD,AND FUROUIS. U REBUKE ME U LEAVE ME FOR DEAD THEN U COME BAC WHEN EVERY THING IS ALRIGHT AND WHEN I AM GONE U ACT LIKE U CARE BUT ONCE U FIND ME U DONT GAVE A CARE ABOUT ME U JUST "NEED" ME I AM JUST UR PLAT THING NOW I AM THROUGH WITH U I DONT WANT TO BE A PART OF U ANY MORE JUST LEAVE IT ALONE BUT U WONT BEACUSE U R LOST WITH OUT ME BECAUSE I AM LIGHT AND U "NEED" ME BUT NOT THIS TIME I REBUKE U

Comments

[La Petite Mofette]

Yes absolutely re-type it to only capitalize certain words, and yea this isn't a "txt msg" SPELL out the word you; not u...

[Redpandamaniacal]

I agree, I almost didn't read it. This poem would, in my opinion, be better if organized into lines and stanzas and unless it is intentional, I wouldn't make so many spelling mistakes as it detracts form the work. When writing poetry, not text messaging, you probably should use words like you instead of u unless, that as well, is intentional.

[-xo--Ali--ox-]

i suggest you re-type your poem so that it is organized and easier to read. try to use capital lettering to EMPHASIZE certain words, as i had did so there. studies show that if you capitalize one word in a sentence you will read it again. but this just turns readers away from you.