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What a day
what a day in the fields what a day in the plains what a day in the medows what a day in the rains
what a day in the oceans what a day in the seas what a day in the grass what a day in the breeze.
what a day of grace what a day of please.
- by Lieutenant978girl |
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- | Submitted on 12/01/2008 |
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- Title: what a day
- Artist: Lieutenant978girl
- Description: well this is a lil somthin i wrote for a teacher MR. mike cobillas a 5th grade teacher at dove hill school. i hope u like it cuz he did
- Date: 12/01/2008
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Comments (3 Comments)
- X --- Imperfectiion - 12/21/2008
- did a good job i liked the repeititon a little bit. i think it could be more vivid a little plain. 4/5
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- Yosaoru - 12/05/2008
- well i will be sincere , i dont get the feeling is too plain but i cant get better just try to make it a lil longer and choose more expresive words....dont worry u got a 4/5
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- Lieutenant978girl - 12/01/2008
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