Jesus

• Artist: shanyanguonna
• Description: this is a very old poem i wrote long time ago it has won many awards. I thought if it was this good i would try my luck on gaia. so tell me what the people of gaia think of this poem!
  here is the link on poetry.com were i submited it and won so many things i am a poet of the year and this very poem will be published in a very very big book i for got what it is called... but it cost me $75.99 with a discount to buy it!http://www.poetry.com/publications/display.asp?ID=P8947170&BN=999&PN=1
• Date: 12/11/2008
• Tags: jesus

You died for others and my sins.
Upon the cross with hatful pins,
painfully drilled in your hands and feet.
You rose agian with a heat beat.

You are the son of the lord and my savior.
You have done a lot for us and never asked for a favor.
You are so much more than a brother to me.
I'm axactly what your daddt wanted me to be.

My days without you were gloomyand dark
Befor I asked you into my heart.
Now my days are very bright
And are full loaded with light.

A of these things you have done fo us, Jesus.
You are infinty times better than reese's Peices

Comments

[TikTokTikTok]

i agree with the others. the reeses pieces thing is VERY CHEESY. and plus you could of probaly added more emotion too.

[Raziel is mine]

I find it hard to believe this has won awards. It is littered with spelling mistakes, it is plain, boring, no depth or emotion; you simply spout off what you've gotten from church/the Bible. Also, the Reese thing is just stupid.

[Agent_O_cokepower]

it was awesome...up till the "reeses peices"! that was a tad random and kinda broke the spell for me..

[dee32693]

This is great! But there are numerous spelling mistakes. Just take a quick break and fix it if you can *is not sure wether it's allowed*

and LOL xD that last line =) <3

oh and doesn't gaia NOT allow previously published works to be republished??? check the rules just in case dudette

[emolemon18]

That was very good! ^_^ God bless! <><