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Beauty is a hideous word
Full of distaste, full of shame
The untimely suicide of a battered nerd
Beauty is the whore we cannot tame
Artificial beauty is nothing less but a sin
So cruel and blood thirsty is it's game
You look like a fish, so where is your fin?
Your lipstick, your makeup, your mirror's to blame
Everyone around you says you're a b***h
So often said, it's now your first name
We should dispose of you, you annoying little itch
And destroy your unrealistic fame
Oh look now, you're one of us
You're what you'd call lame
All these years you've made such a fuss
This is what happened when your demise came
Take a look from our perspective
All of them are dressed the same
Fistfulls of s**t is what they give
Beauty is what we call a sadistic dame
- by FilthyWubz |
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- | Submitted on 12/12/2008 |
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- Title: Beauty is a hideous word.
- Artist: FilthyWubz
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Description:
What can i say, i like poetry. It's how i vent all my problems. I just hope you'll enjoy and can relate. Btw, no mean comments please. I'm just 13 :sweat: I wrote this 'cause im sick and tired of all the preppy little bitches who think that dressing up the same will make you cool. It doesn't, you seriously look like Barbie barfed up we she ate the other day. That's right, lipstick and silicone.
Please rate and comment!! - Date: 12/12/2008
- Tags: beauty hideous
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Comments (3 Comments)
- deactivated-28347834753 - 01/18/2009
- such as grammar. (fistfulls should be fistfuls, it's in the second verse should be its.) Oh, and perhaps you should elevate the subject matter beyond high school. Perhaps talking about how beauty is a cruel mistress or lamenting the loss of a dear friend to the masses would be a good step to take in your second draft. All in all, though, a good poem.
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- deactivated-28347834753 - 01/18/2009
- I like the imagery (sadistic dame, beauty is a hideous word) and the vulgarity - it fits perfectly. It needs a little refining, though: your youth is showing through. Try to polish it a little more. Perhaps a transition to free verse would be a good choice; your rhymes seem to ring a little false at the end of each verse. Also, some imagery is a little strange or overdone; 'nerd', for example, is a little crude for a poem of this calibre. Finally, you need a beta reader for the little things. (c
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- InsanityBecomesHer - 12/12/2008
- Very nice Trainee ^_^
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