This is the End

• Artist: mokona_lya
• Description: This is one of my few complete songs.
  The only thing I can't get down is the melody..
  Tell me what you think?
• Date: 12/22/2008
• Tags: voice

Verse 1

This is the voice inside your head
The one that says “you should be dead”
They don’t care
Do you dare?
This is the end
This is the end

This is the voice inside your head
I say “screw them, you don’t need the shame”
So pathetic
You make me sick
This is the end
This is the end

Chorus

And for some reason
I can’t explain
I get the feeling
You’ve seen my pain
You felt the rush
And held my grasp
You took my breath
And there I lay…

Verse 2

This is the voice breathing down on you
Just give up now, you cannot win
Don’t forgive
And don’t forget
This is the end
This is the end

This is the voice with muffled cries
Just saw you sleeping in a puddle
So deep and red
It’s now your bed
This is the end
This is the end

Chorus

And for some reason
I can’t explain
I have no feeling
The end of pain
Yet it’s so dark
So cold and damp
That one last breath
And now I fade…

And now she’s gone
No more she’s spoken
She cannot feel
No more she’s broken
And yet the hole
She left behind
Will gape forever
She took her life

Comments

[Gerard_Ray_Frank]

I love it!!!!!! And thanks for commenting on my poem, even though it's crappy.

[Deadcant_Closed]

Have to say I like how it is written. I'm imaging the beginning chorus would have a more focus on a mellow or such whispering with a distorted background building of sound, probably progressing into more heavy, but overall I don't get much a overly heavy feel from it. Then sort of looping back to how the beginning when it nears the end. Hope that helps.