The Patient Child

• Artist: Tojoiri Mimasori
• Description: it's about a kid(not me) who is poor and lives on the streets he's kind of an orphan, but this poem is about true life how kids like him livin on the streets feel when their family abandons them....
• Date: 12/30/2008
• Tags: patient child orphan

Like an abandoned child I gave up on the word "Hope"
In the eyes of people I was important as a melted bar of soap
I have no one to hold
Instead people just scold me
I've grown cowardly over the years
That i'm afraid to trust anything spoken in my ears
I'm a disgrace to mankind
So I never show my face until 9:00
So people won't come to this place
I'm only seven
And I pray everyday that God will just take me to Heaven
I don't have a family
They packed their bags and left without me
Sometimes I wonder if i'm better off alone
But...
I know that someday someone will come back home....
won't they?

Comments

[Miss Salsa Sam]

ur getting good..some of the things u say make sence and are key factors to the poem but some rymes sond out of place. My advice is just to keep writing poems. Its very good!

[Tojoiri Mimasori]

k thanx for da opinion!!! i need all the reviews i can get!!!^^

[DeDrim]

so pathetic living...for the child
it's nice but i'm looking for something more..
i'm not a professional but that's my opinion..