you made me sick

• Artist: john tb vogel
• Description: another one of the songs i wrote...
  i have this and broken heart...for now at least...
• Date: 01/21/2009
• Tags: made sick

you made me cry
i wish i would die
take the knife from my heart so i can stop cring

i'm cring on the out side,
and dieing on the inside

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

you say i didn't love you...
what do i have to do to prove to you,
that i really did love you for who u are...

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

i gave you every thing you ever asked for...
and this is how you thank me?
this is how it ends?

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

then fare well, good bye,
we are through you and i...

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

i used to love you
now all i fell toward you is hate

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

i made you laugh
and you made me cry

you made me happy once...
now you make me sick...

this is the end angel...
there is no happy ending for me...
and you just smile like nothing ever happened....

Comments

[azure takai]

"You made me happy once... now you make me sick..." Do not take these things as insults, think of them as constructive criticism. Something tells me English might not be your first language if that is true then it would explain a few things. But you can still at least spell check your words.

All the best, Takai.

[azure takai]

In all honesty, I feel the poem is alright but mediocre in a sense. You do not even take the responsibility to spell certain words correctly, you use the letter u instead of the word in some instances which to me come off as an insult. A simply thing being the capitalization of the letter I doesn't even seem to be taken into account. The ending seems a bit misplaced, it doesn't seem to completely fit with the rest of it. Perhaps you should have ended it with...

[XXXXXxxX-kiss_me-XxxXXXXX]

omg this is a sad poem but verey well done

[kikanawj]

OH
MY
GOD!
I
LOVE
THIS
POEM!
very good blaugh