Nightmare

• Artist: Chuckasauras
• Description: This is my first poem, so please go easy. Please no nasty comments, just tell me if it's alright. Sorry some words don't rhyme. I don't write poems, so it's okay if you think it's really bad. I was bored
• Date: 02/04/2009
• Tags: nightmare

This nightmare I was having
Haunted me day and night
It got in my way
Never left my sight

I thought I could hide it
I thought it was fine
But deep in my heart
It felt like crime

Confront him said my heart
He knew it was wrong
That nigtmare he gave me
Left scars for so long

He made feel guilty
In ways I can’t explain
These feelings I’m having
I don’t know what to say

I had enough of this
The games he played
Acting like it never happened
The lies he gave

I would never do anything
Nothing, he would say
Lies I said
And there he layed

Crying he was,
Trying to remember
That sad day that
I was scared forever

Now I was lost
I didn’t have a home
A whole in my heart
It began to grow

I didn’t have anything
A heart I did not have
For he had stolen it
I just want him back

Comments

[violet_rampage]

not all poems have to rhyme.
i like the poems that don't rhyme the best, but tell a story, kind of like this one. pretty good job! just make sure to double check for missed words, wrong words (such as "whole" should have been "hole" wink and punctuation.
keep up the good work!

[XxXTeenage_LesXxX]

not bad for boredom. u left out a couple words, and it was lacking punctuation, but overall fairly good. i like that it was really...(4 lack of a better word) hidden...and not straightforward. in my opinion, that's how poems should be. anywho...3/5