Foiled

• Artist: XxX-Taka-XxX
• Description: i'm bored, and i haven't entered the writing arenas yet. tell me what you all think. honesty is appretiated, even if it's rude. I cannot learn if I don't know my mistakes.
• Date: 02/24/2009
• Tags: foiled

Happy rays
Silent days
Gone to the wind
Your will I bend.
And ho! look who's laughing
With no audience to hear
Noone for a word
And the darkness beleveled.
Who is the crazed?
The sane?
The madhatter of our tale?
And hark, I laugh
I laugh alone.

Comments

[XxX-Taka-XxX]

lol, i'm guessing freestyle, because I only write what's in my head at that moment. Thank you for your comment! ^-^
and i didn't know I can use my username as a tag! XD

[Silvery Shadow 13]

Try adding your username as a tag, that makes it easier to find your work. Also, spellcheck, twice. Other than that though, good for a beginer. Is it freestyle or a form of meter I don't recognize? I like the Alice in Wonderland reference, you have good word choice.