Done with it all

• Artist: Fri Noggin
• Description: Just one of those things that I write spur of the moment.
• Date: 03/15/2009
• Tags: done knife free sell over

I'm done.
It's over.
These things take me over,
and sell me short.
I want them gone, and I want them gone now.
So, with a knife in hand,
I cut them out, and forever I'm free.

Comments

[rocko11091]

Nice one mate...for spur of the moment, its pretty good....but no one is safe from my constructive criticism...especially in the art arena...
interesting concept...decent flow...i like how you puctuated it for emphasis...imagery is ok, i know you can do better...the entire thing is a metaphor in a sense, so thats good...
Concept: 4/5
Style: 5
Flow: 4
Figurative Lang./Imagery: 3
Overall: 4.25/5 (4)

[BlackRoseWriter]

so sad *hug*

[Zelic Frobe]

ehh, it IS about killing yourself. But as long as you dont actually DO that, Fri, I think that this is really good.

[kyouku-chan]

scarlet is right...

[twotinator]

i really hope this isn't about killing yourself

[Bellatrix Scarlet]

I really like the first three lines. The rhythm is rad.