Realistic Dream

• Artist: blink-182xP
• Description:
  I am using this
  for a poetry
  project for
  school but I
  want the people
  of gaia to rate
  it first.
• Date: 03/26/2009
• Tags: realistic dream

Lost lives
Broken knifes
City’s go up in flames
From this very day nothing will ever be the same
Hellish monsters plowing through the land causing nothing but pain
But when you woke up it was all a scary dream

Comments

[Espyyon]

add more...it doesn't seem over . the last line ehh... i don't like

[XXXXblackbloodXXXX]

you need to add more to the poem but other than that very good I give it a 4/5