Alone.

• Artist: sk8tergothgrl18
• Description: I wrote this to reach out to anyone who has thought about suicide or is/was depressed. It can also apply to you for different things, though.
  Please comment on it ! I can understand how it feels to be depressed , I was .
  Anyways. I love to write and do other forms of art .
• Date: 03/30/2009
• Tags: life death

There was a girl who had no home,
was alone and deserted.

Left to fend for herself ,
often times she risked facing life behind the bars of law ,
stealing food from stores ,
talking to no one .

Dressed in black,
hiding in the shadows of alleys ,
afraid of emerging from her post.

So this girl decided to go to school,
no one suspected a thing of this young girl.

Finally, the girl couldn't take the pain,
and killed herself in the pouring rain.

The kids at school didn't even care,
that this shy little girl was no longer there.

Comments

[fireshadowkatdemon]

Agreed. But this is good, it allows the reader's to sympathize. I like it.

[Fearless Fly]

I have to agree with what the other person said.

[cooll666725]

Very good purpose and meaning, but it could use a little work on the rhythm. I give it a 4/5.