Death

• Artist: XxI_Rawr_WinstonxX
• Description:
• Date: 04/08/2009
• Tags: death

I feel the warm liquid spill from from my wounds,
it seem to thicken as it drips,
the room spins,
The wall close in around me.
i slowly slip into the darkness.
slipping slipping slipping.
i finally fall of the edge of live and into the depts of hell

Comments

[XxAllie-AsylumxX]

love it.

[cooll666725]

I'll give it a 3/5 star rating because your grammar isn't all that good, and you need to work on the organization and rhythm. Other than that it's not too bad, but it definitely needs some work.

[livii96]

this my peom:
your peom is crap
you should try a rap
not my personal favrote
but some people crave it
write a new one for people to see
its for most eyes
but just not for me!