Looking Through the Window

• Artist: clumsy-story of my life
• Description: Well, about 5 minutes after I wrote a journal entry asking for idea's for poems (I was at a serious writers block and in desperate need to write, but not sure what about,) i started to come up with this. Hope you like it!! Strong critisism prefered!! :)
  
  P.S-sorry its so short.
• Date: 04/23/2009
• Tags: looking through window

Looking through the window
The truth is but a distance away
I am at a stand-still
As the world whizes by
Time is a nessasity no more
Life grows and changes
While I watch from afar
I am invisible to all who care to see
As I reach out to grab my destiney
And see what truth it holds....

Comments

[chief musician]

i happened to pass by your work..

the content is good but the pattern is not..
i know im not good at writting but i'm sure every poem/journal has a pattern or even a rythm...

but besides that it's good...

p.s. we need to work on our spellings... XD

[dabigcheese123]

I liked it!!

[IlIPhsycotic Rampagelll]

nice =]

[sharkserpant20]

Couldve had a stronger ending but was otherwise nice