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Its been a while ...
i used to write poetry alot but
latley the inspiration never hit me.
its funny how i write about things that ive never experinced ...
and yet ... so vived ...
yea oh well ^^
- by Miss NomNom |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/01/2009 |
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- Title: Alone.
- Artist: Miss NomNom
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Description:
Long ago we were one. Two hearts together not two, just one. Without you i feel no pain,
without you there is no vain. I shall destroy the you within me
then alone i shall be. - Date: 05/01/2009
- Tags: alonesad
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Miss NomNom - 05/02/2009
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I can see what you mean by that,
i meant "vain" like pain or a strife
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- Rainbow cat FACE - 05/02/2009
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its kind of awkwardly phrased, and "without you there is no vain" makes no sense to me.
like being extremely proud (like vanity), a vain effort, or did you misspell vein? in any way that you might have meant it, it doesnt really make sense with the rest of the poem. (im pretty sure its and adjective, and youre using it as a noun.) so you might want to change it, or elaborate on what you mean - Report As Spam