Bathtime

• Artist: Melerina
• Description: This is the expierence of a little kid in his night time bath.
• Date: 05/02/2009
• Tags: bathtime

I look around in a sea of bubbles.
Each one delicately laid out on the glass top of the water.
Two ships search the bubbles, almost as if to find hidden treasure.
A big yellow bird bobs around with nothing to loose but the big gleaming sea.
It squeaks for joy as it dives in and out of the small waves.
Underneath a submarine examines every inch of the smooth hard bottom.
A shark circles it unwilling to be discovered.
And then a hand reaches to me pulling me out.
With a quick switch the sea begins to swirl into a small wirl pool.
The ships sink with out a fight.
The bird tumbles over crashing into the sub.
The shark is sucked under into the big foamy mess.
Then all is gone.
I watch on the shore at what used to be the sea, my sea.
And I watch my sea fade away as some one carries me off into the shadows.

Comments

[Stoner Shriek]

Imaginative, I found two possible spelling errors... 1:"nothing to loose" should actually be "nothing to 'lose'" and "some one" should come together to make one word "someone". If these were intentional errors, then forgive me. :p

Back to the poem, it reminds me of my younger days, where I hated taking baths, however, when I was in one, I never wanted to get out. Haha. It sounds at the end of your poem that the parents pulled the kid out of the bath. "Into The Shadows" Good stuff, keep it up!