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My heart has been shattered
Now it's surrounded by chains
I'm falling apart
And I'm always in pain
My soul has been torn
I'm no longer complete
And I'm constantly haunted
By you in my dreams
Tears fall on my pillow
As I think of you
The painful memories you left
Of a love I once knew
A pain in my heart
An ache in my soul
That's what I get
For falling in love
- by garrettguardgirl |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 05/07/2009 |
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- Title: That's What I Get
- Artist: garrettguardgirl
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Description:
one of my poems, and since this is the first one I'm posting, I'll tell you that all of my poems are either about or addressed to the same girl. She's really the basis of my art and poems and the reason why I write.
I would love if you guys would comment. I haven't been writing that long and am open for suggestions. - Date: 05/07/2009
- Tags: lovebreakup
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Comments (6 Comments)
- I WiLl NeVeR LeT u Go - 05/09/2009
- its deep..... maybe i will send you my poem.... its something like that.... but its not in the arena. its called.... pain... 5/5 + favorite
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- justamanda325 - 05/09/2009
- i think its great =)
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- PoeticWindstorm - 05/09/2009
- in my opinion.....i think it needs to be a bit more descriptive.....(by that i mean how or what specifically happened to your heart...or how its aching).....you dont have to.........thats just me....lol thats how i prefer to make my poems.......but your poem is still pretty good regardless of my input smile
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- WalterHWhite - 05/09/2009
- its good kinda relates to me
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- iiTeddie_Bearr - 05/09/2009
- I like your poem its so truthful but in a way umm...you have got to make it fell like you still love her!!but i luffles your poem any way
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- II White Clouds II - 05/08/2009
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i love this poem
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