Unspoken Duty

• Artist: SwiftGentleman
• Description: Quick poem about the U.S. soldier and the freedoms they preserve. Not political. Comments welcome. Enjoy.
• Date: 05/31/2009
• Tags: poem military

We are they who don't speak upon return

Who witness the pain and villages burn

We are the ones who protect those who cry

Who will give up their lives to defend the rights

Of those who don't know or don't care at all

Please just remember the ones who fall, who crawl

For your safety, out of love and respect, for those lost

We must never forget the ones who have fought

And the ones who still fight, for life and liberty

Let us show them we still deserve the right to be free

-Dedicated to the American soldier

Comments

[SwiftGentleman]

I appreciate your criticism, but it wasn't written for poetic purposes. It was more about my feelings and concerns for the military at the time. I had just finished writing a 12 page paper in college about PTSD in the military, so that is what inspired the poem. Though, thanks again for your feedback! I greatly appreciate it!

[OceanicLullaby]

Very nice theme; but in all honesty, I believe that the actual poetic sense can be improved. The wording doesn't flow as well as it can at its maximum potential, and to me, it doesn't stir up many emotions.

You're definitely onto something good; but as I said, I think it can be better.
4/5 for now.
^^

And thanks for the rating on my avatar, The Dreamcatcher.

[AsianKittyCat858]

i luv it!! 100/5!!!! lol

[A Krysis]

That's awesome you would write one for them
I support them 100%
Amazing
5/5