dark

• Artist: Blood Ninja811
• Description: for all dark poetry fans.not much experience in this area, so give me feedback
• Date: 06/10/2009
• Tags: dark

tears trickle slowly down her face,
as cold dark hands of sadness,
hold her in a bitter embrace,
shadows twist the walls,
like a monstrous beast,
threatening to consume her soul
regarding her body in the least,
the tears flow on refusing to stop
she decides to end it all
to end her life to stop the pain
and to her that price is small
the demons lean in,
waiting for the end,
she picks up the knife, instrument of her final sin
and she tries to stop the pain one last time,
not succeeding in the least,
for hell lasts to the end of eternity and time

Comments

[blood_sucker4life114]

its insainly depressing...you must have been pretty bored....lol. you should try to write about something a little more...less-depressing.

[lost342]

I do believe there is a certain allure to dark poetry, but I think you could write better if you wrote about something a little more original. Why is everyone so obsessed with depressing topics? Yes, poetry isn't always uplifiting, but it can also express other emotions. I think you're an excellent writer and you have good potential.

[Blood Ninja811]

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