On This Cloudy Day

• Artist: clannad-94
• Description: Well I wrote this a long while back and thought to submit it just to see what people think about it. I like it, but I feel as if something is missing. I can't determine what though. Anyways hope you enjoy!
• Date: 06/11/2009
• Tags: cloudy poem time free

On this cloudy day
Time is wasting away
I stand here and stare out
Beyond where I can shout
To where the first trees grow
To where the fine wind blows

On this Cloudy day
Time is wasting away
I sit here and stare
To where they give me glares
To the face
I can't disgrace

On this cloudy day
Time is wasting away
I sleep here and wait
When will they open the gate
When will I be free
And be able to shout in glee

On this cloudy day
Time is wasting away
But that doesn't matter to me
Because I know I can't be free

Comments

[yo ziza]

i like it...but it does seem to be missing somethin....hmmm....

[shinitai666]

It does seem to miss something... I don't know what though. It's still good.

[Lady Alice Road Kamelot]

It's really good, and I don't think it's really missing anything. You're good! 5/5