The Masquerade II

• Artist: XxXxX_BAD BOY_XxXxX
• Description: You will see.............
• Date: 06/26/2009
• Tags: masquerade

My face is purple,

Eyes glisten red as blood,

Lips black as the night sky,

My soul is covered in shadows,

I am suffacating inside,

My heart's pulse stops,

My life is a hidden world,

When I take my mask off,

I can live in humanity,

I actually have a purpose to live,

So I walk the streets noticed as everyone.

Comments

[majesticangel07]

This poem is written very nicely, but you must be sure not to sound repetitive, or redundant. For instance, when you said heart, there is no need to say pulse afterwards. Very nice poem though. Keep up the good work.
~*WinglessAngel*~

[YouAreEverythingToMe]

Awesome cool nice

[Failure and Disfunction]

Well written.