Romance

• Artist: RockNRollChick13
• Description: Uhmm.. Just putting my passion in words of how i feel.
• Date: 07/22/2009
• Tags: romance

My ego's bruised,
My body used
My thoughts confucsed
But I stand accused

I've been around
Both up and down
And all I've found
Is that im sorrow bound

I took my time
Bet my last dime
Used my whit and rhyme
But it didn't make the climb

This pointless dance
They call romance
Is just a trance
Controlled by chance

But maybe you
With all you do
Could pull me threw
I think it's true

Emotionally abused
But my demise defused
With you my muse
I remain enthused

Just keep me near
We're in the clear
With you my dear
I've lost my fear

Comments

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Overall, I like what you have here. I have two points of advice: always check and double check your spelling, and use punctuation to set the rhythm of your piece. Above all, keep writing. You're good at expressing yourself.

[Somethin _Surreal]

Really good! I am not one for ryming (I can't), but you did a really good job! 5/5 (which is really hard to get from me!