man is only mortal

• Artist: Sudden tears
• Description: i'd like to say i wrote this, but i can't; my dad did(i told him i'd post it for him). it's a short poem about lifes truths.
  p.s. if u want to see some of my poems(or the other one i poted for my dad), then please check out my gallery.
• Date: 09/27/2009
• Tags: only mortal

man is only mortal
he lives until he dies
he asks so many questions and hears so many lies
i only wish to know the difference
between what is right and what is wrong
i need no one man to lead me
the truth is all i long
no man has all the answers
just a different veiw
and his thoughts they must be wheighed off
to see wich ones are true

Comments

[Sudden tears]

thnks, 4 the comments.^^ btw, i forgot to metion that i got the pic from photo bucket, therfore it isn't mine. smile

[halocsin]

i like the picture

[Jade Gears]

I have one suggestion for your dad then. The second and third stanzas rhyme at the end in both sound and written so, where as it doesn't in any of the other stanza ending words. I suggest to change one or the other to make the poem more consistent.
Otherwise, nicely written :3