Take my hand and never let go

• Artist: xXRawr-GirrXx
• Description: I was listening to the band "Dear Juliet" and I started thinking of some things and I started writing and all this came to me. :] . I hope you like it, please rate and comment. Constructive Critism is welcome. Ps. I also enjoy having poetry partners. If you have a topic you want to write about or a genre and you think I could do well with you, help you out, ect. I'd be happy to :]
• Date: 09/29/2009
• Tags: take hand never

Take my hand and never let go.
And we'll walk through the Gallose, terrified and all alone.
We'll touch the sky, off by mere kilometers,
And the rain will cover all our fears.

Take my hand and never let go.
Our bodies will sway with the ocean's flow.
And as we walk across the ocean shores,
We'll hide our tears away in our inner cores.

Take my hand and never let go.
Don't you worry, you're not alone
Cuz we've got eachother
This we've shown

Take my hand and never let go.
Cuz, yeah, we all must know
It's me and you against the world.
So take us as your average fools

So, take my hand and never let go.
Cuz the world will never know,
We have the strength
To overcome the pain, the tears, and all our fears.

Comments

[xXRawr-GirrXx]

yeahh I know I shouldn't have but I prefer it. Cuz feels so much more better to me than 'Cause. Idk, maybe it's just an illusion to me, but it just seems righter

[critic-the-homeless]

Ya its pretty good. But you shouldnt have spelt 'cuz; like that. 4/5

[xXRawr-GirrXx]

Yeahh haha i know but it shows how far it is and you should just say Kilo then meters in your head instead of normally bunching them together. It was hard for me to do too but I was eventually able to do it myself lol

[Monjong-wer]

i LOVED the last part!!!! it is beautifull!!! a VERY GOOD poem!!! =D (i think that you shoul try to write a diferent word than "kilometers" (it makes the beggining a little strange...) its just an opinion...) 5/5