Illusion

• Artist: XxXBrennaxBearXxX
• Description: short poem i came up with in a couple of minutes
• Date: 09/30/2009
• Tags: illusion

Life is but an illusion
It makes you feel
It makes you beleve
To pass the time by

As soon as it starts it ends
in the blink of an eye
It all ends

Life is like a book
You have your ups and downs
But with it the end
The end is always
The end

Those who don't care
Have seen throu the
Illusion

But most people are happy
With their "life"
Unable to see the sad truth

That life is but an illusion
And that it has to end sometime!

Comments

[Aleydream]

I think you mean through instead of "throu"

If you had some more punctuation in the poem it would give readers a better understanding of how they should be reading it. Otherwise it seems a little disconnected from the first three stanzas to the last three stanzas. In the first three stanzas it uses more of an omniscient entity as the speaker but when you address "Those who don't care" it is a very tangible thing, it's a physical person which is why it feels disconnected.

[Hells_Song91]

"The end is always The end" very poetic and strong.

[Blackening_Stars]

Amazing poem.Very nicely done.
It's so true and deep,I can realate.
Never,ever,mind haters.They just don't dig that far. :]
This is now one of my favourite poems.
Keep the good work up. :]
5/5

[iiRicin]

Your are right, especially since my friend is having a hard time she always is stressed and vents about how much she wants to be 'cool' May I show this to her?

[Cat of Ice]

compeletly true. my mom looks at me and wonders why im messy and spontanous and uncaring of grades. but i figured out excatly what i need to do. im above the stress of socicety and love my life the way it is. thanks for making me realize other people think like this too, as my mom assumes im crazy. just posted a poem on it infact.

[Clare13tube]

It makes me feel like crying of joy

[BentiaSHalke]

An illusion, the dream of another maybe the sick fantasies of some unworldly being. Or maybe it's our own world. Maybe there really is only one "US" that controlls "LIFE". Or maybe, if we try hard enough, we can change the world and do things we never thought, because we created this world by ourselves. Or maybe nothingness created everything