Love Struck

• Artist: Native Clown
• Description: Re-vision of my poem "LOVE"...i don't like to go over the originals...added to new lines and redid a few others
• Date: 10/03/2009
• Tags: love struck

in your eyes i see
everything dear 2 me
thur your lips i taste
life in eternal state
from your touch i feel
loves stinging chill

to lose you
would spell death for me
to mistreat you
would kill me inside
to go without you
is a thought i cannot bear

when i'm not with you
i feel so lost
when your in my arms
i feel compleat
to love you
is to live

for love i write
this poem tonight
though it's black as coal
my love for you is like gold
i love you till death comes
but now is not the time

death can try
but nothing well keep me from you
i'll risk my life
just to lie by your side
i'll face any foe
just give me the ok

you've be so sweet to me
and i've yet to know why
but all that matters
is that i have you by myside
to have and to hold
now and forever

your love is my life
please don't let me die
tell me you love me...
tell me you'll be there...
even when i die

Comments

[Native Clown]

y? im not in english class...
and y do i need to be formal in a vitural world?
O.o well....besides with girls....always gotta be formal with girls

[Faerie]

Its good but you seriously need to reformat, capitalize, and punctuate.

[11Hats11]

Wow!! that was really good! the description was amazing!