Dream?

• Artist: code_monkey3000
• Description: A young woman trapped in the darkness of a nightmare, which turns out to be a warning of a terrible tragity that is happening as she sleeps.
  
  I hope you enjoy this poem. I was bored during class so I just started writing. Judge my poem however you want just please don't leave any rude comments. I would like to hear how it could be better rivised so you can kind of help me there. Anyhoo enjoy! ^w^
• Date: 11/03/2009
• Tags: dream

Trapped in a place I do not know
No place to hide
No place to go

I wish I could run, but my legs are not there
I look down but there is only air

I see a man in the distance
I call out for help within an instance

I look away, but then look back
He is in my face just like that

"Please," I beg him, "What's going on?"
He stares at me like nothing is wrong

"My dear young lady do not fright.
For you are going to a place filled with light

But now you must wake to take one final breath,
For tonight will be your very own death."

Comments

[HotShot1489]

Its good but in my opiion it idk ( I dont know), it just sounds weird as I say it in my head, it sounds like your trying to fit to much into somthing little.... i do that too so nw (no worrys) please rate and comment on my poems too! smile