Wind, Sun, and Rain

• Artist: Ora the Owlish
• Description: This poem rhymes, but seeing as how new I am to this, I can't say how. Couplet/narrative? Anyways...I hope this helps to fill the "happy" niche in the Arena. I sort of...forced....myself to write this without the help of inspiration, so I can't claim that it is good (the "sun" section is especially weak). Please give me what grammatical fixes you can so I can get this thing up to speed!
  
  Have a great holiday season!:D
• Date: 12/06/2009
• Tags: wind rain elemental nature happy

Wind that comes and wind that goes
Gusty gale that ever grows
Tap my window, rub the glass
Ruffle hair and ruffle grass.

Ray of sunshine, speed of light
Warm the faces in your flight
Symbol of eternal glee
Pierce the heaven, pierce the sea.

Rain refresh the dying ground
Heal the places where you're found
Trickle down my window pane
I praise you sun and wind and rain.

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[Ora the Owlish]

Thanks to whomever submitted the 5.0, but...I really do need feedback. Will someone please give me some pointers?