My Garden's Tulip

• Artist: MalevolentChocolate
• Description: I'm not entirely sure why I wrote this, but there it is. I apologize for any grammatical or spelling mistakes, I tried to fix most of them, but if you do find any, be sure to point them out to me, and I will fix them.
  
  I know the rhythm is broken and uneven, and I just want you all to know: I planned it that way (actually, that was a lie: it just turned out like that, and I went along with it.).I hope you all enjoy it, though it wasn't one of my best pieces.
• Date: 12/26/2009
• Tags: mygardenstulip malchoco malevolentchocolate meow

My garden's tulip,
Alone in its faithful
solitude,
Rises for
the sun.

No need to compete
For its water or
blissful sunshine,
It grows and
prospers.

Rain clouds
begin
to build,
and the air
gets heavy.
Mother Earth
is looking after
the small
bud.

Rain-kissed leaves
greet me
At sunrise
the next morning,
smiling and
shimmering

I walk across
the growing garden,
searching,
looking,
for that
beautiful tulip.

Footprints
decorate the
packed, muddy
earth.

My flower is not there.
The only thing
to remember it by
is a squashed,
mangled,
muddy
petal.

Someone has trampled
my fresh new bud.
Who could it be?
I'll kill them for sure.

Comments

[Fraudulent_Veracity]

i like it. its really pretty and i kinda like the rithim and the breaks in the lines. good job smile

[MalevolentChocolate]

I've changed the poem! I really changed it to fit my mood... I've been feeling sort of... depressed lately.

Not sure why.

[UncontainedHysteria]

wow. fantasmic. really.

I always wished I could write poetry like this, but never really got that gift. You have a gift from god and the angels. Cherish it, because you are one of the lucky few who got the "poetry gene".

[wink_unlimited]

wow. i really like ALL of your work!!1

altho i liked the other one, "as if you were" better, but it was really good!

plz post more like these!!!!!! please? for me? jk. lol

[Fille aux Cheveux de Lin]

I like it.

[MalevolentChocolate]

I would prefer if you were to read it the way all poems should be read: out loud (even if you whisper quietly), and pausing where every line breaks. I believe that- for this poem, at least- if you were to read straight on through like a book, it wouldn't sound as good, and you would notice all the flaws in my writing razz