Heartbreak

• Artist: Chelly17
• Description: ok i wrote this months ago for an English project....
• Date: 05/01/2010
• Tags: heartbreak

Where did you go?
Why did you leave me here?
How am i suppose to get through?
Why aren't you trying my tears?
I thought you'd take me away
to some far away land.
Instead you made me stay,
left me here in dreamland.
You can save me from this pain.
You would rid me of this heartache.
My heart you can unchain.
Sp come back to me for my sake.
What am i suppose to do
when you left me here without you?

Comments

[Chamomile Dream]

Many spelling mistakes, a little generic. Try using some metaphors or similes, as you seem to be lacking in literary techniques; or if you can't think of any suitable, some simple wordplay would spice up your writing a little.

[L37e14]

its really good,sad dou