Random limerick I made

• Artist: 4 bubble Mage
• Description: I know its not great but I thought I would at least put it out there to see what people would think. Constructive criticism would be appreciated
• Date: 01/27/2011
• Tags: random limerick made fish water

Once there was fish who tried,
real hard to learn how to fly
so he flapped his fins
and leaped and grinned
but fish can't fly so he died

Comments

[Amarisnerd]

i loved it its creative yet full of reality

[Spritizzle]

That's great haha
If you look at it from a deeper perspective it says something.

[fate6007]

try making it longer, instead of just plainly saying the fish died make a fun or exciting story about it.