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Can't Hope Just lie down
before Pain comes around
Can't I just say a word of hello
before you'll let me go
Can't Dreams Just disappear
before they turn into nigtmares
Can't I just close my eyes so I can't see
before my reality turns into a misery
Can't Happiness Just go away
before sadness comes and stay
Can't I just feel one more joy
before I completely feel destroy
Can't a Heart Just Quit ahead
before it gets hurt as thought once said
Can't I just walk out of this
before I know I won't be miss.
- by llAngelo Outcastll |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 04/04/2011 |
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- Title: Just quit ahead
- Artist: llAngelo Outcastll
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- Date: 04/04/2011
- Tags: just quit ahead
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Comments (2 Comments)
- XWEET14 - 06/02/2011
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I don't know if this was your intention, of making me think, but this is where I've come to.
You've turned simople emotions and treated them as living things.
Making this poem unique.
Making this poem yours.
I congradulate you in your fine piece, but before you go much further would like you to think about the other things around you.
This seemed to be revolving around you.
Big mistake, so I'm giving you four, out of five. <3 (4) - Report As Spam
- Zlae - 04/24/2011
- You've intentionally neglected the use of the plural in lot's of cases to make it rhyme. It makes it sound a little odd when I read it in my head, like you're trying to be illiterate.
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