Un-Necessitated Need

• Artist: Emilyssa Flidais
• Description: I wrote this last semester for my poetry class~~it's about this guy I once knew who hurt me emotionally but who I just can't seem to tear my thoughts away from.
  Hope you guys like it~~it is a little vague, so I'm sorry if you dislike poetry that doesn't rhyme and isn't necessarily completely coherent~~it's pretty train-of-thought.
  Enjoy~~
• Date: 07/06/2011
• Tags: unnecessitated need poem

You, beautiful darling,
Missed one lately
(Now, not sooner, because before you existed
In despised glory, occupying
A vague corner of my dying intellect)
Gone from original lust
To deepest hate
To desire and wanting/needing
Your return to me.

I wish we could exist in the bright
Planes of my own device
Where liquid daylight seeps quietly
Through the broken asphalt beneath our floating feet
And all is well
(In a world created by connection
sans intimacy) –
Yes, it could be said that I desire you.
Return, amamé.

Comments

[SheskaHiwatari]

For once, a poem that doesn't look like it was written by a fifth grader! This really touched me, as I'm in the same boat. It has inspired me, an aspiring writer myself. So thank you, good civilian.

[Alurin The Forsaken One]

I don't know poetry and I suck at writing it >_< I don't understand it all or follow it but I like it ^^ It don't give me the creeps (or well not right now in reading it >< wink It gets a 5/5 from me ^__^ good luck. Could you rate back on either writing (idk if both can be voted on or just one) and maybe even my current avi if you want? Thank you! ^^

[in a pinto forever]

Simply gorgeous. I love, love, love the imagery. Even on my best days, I could not hope to come anywhere near what you have accomplished in this piece. I hope you wouldn't mind if I gave you a 5/5; in my opinion, it is a rating often overused, but in this case, quite certainly well-earned.

[kingchris14]

3 words for you.
fan taz tic
lmao jk jk
Great work tho
great

[Ayanagami]

I don't even think T.S. Eliot was coherent. (Well, he irritates me because of this, so...) This work, I feel, is much more coherent than most poetry.

[Dolaeruxus]

Free verse? Wonderful.
Good poetry doesn't have to rhyme or be obviously clear.