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Posted: Sat Aug 18, 2007 9:54 pm
All away, It went away. The happiness that made me, It's gone away.
If I could bring it back Oh, I would. Just to breathe, To focus, Remake you.
You are my new, New happiness. Took me out of the storm. Into your arms.
I can't explain my security, maybe you can.
All I do is fail. How do you put up with me? Who am I?
True to what I believe, I live in temptation, Also in regret, for what I've done.
When will I learn? I am eroaded by ignorance.
Wishing you would destroy me, Instead of bring out the best of me. But you say you love me.
so... tell me what you think... please
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Posted: Mon Aug 20, 2007 8:55 am
i like it..except for the away part. that was repetive and almost made me not want to read the rest of the poem
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