Icy Hell~Yuki's Poetry~

[Yukiko8]

This is the thread in which I will post my poetry, I will try my hardest to post it as soon as it is created, but...if you are having a hard time waiting you can go to my journal. I contain a mere fraction of my poetry in there.  

[Yukiko8]

I wrote a page long poem for my sister (fallen_rayne) (Her perpective)
I capitalize some un-important words for Effect.

-Black Rayne-

'I sit here, in my Dark Throne. The greatest Evil, the world has known.
My black heart, remains un-breaking, even when I think, of the lifes I'm taking.
I bask in the Shadows, of my creation. The world now, knows not salvation.
Chaos Rules! It makes me smile, I guess you could say, I'm in Denile.

There's a different rythym in this verse.

I was born with Evil in my heart, it all happened in the start.
I'm not bothered by my thoughts, everything, before me rotts.
The World is Mine!....Here comes the rain, oh, it's beauty, drives me insane.
Pitch Black puddles across the streets, a time when two great elements meet.

Yes, the Armmagedon was fine, but this rain, so mysterious, so devine.
It leaves me in wonder. How many lands has it plundered?
It spreads the feelings of Hatred and Sorrow. Sometimes I feel, there's no tommorow.

Chaos Rules! It makes me smile. I guess you could say, I'm in denile.'  

[Yukiko8]

Read it slow, for effect.

~Dungeon Of Abyss~

Stare all you wish, it's just pure black,
from anywhere, could come, my next attack.

I hide everywhere, your fears I've unlocked.
Do you really think, your the one being mocked?

What brought you here? Oh, what could it be?
All I know is, you'll never be free!

Your trapped in my dungeon. The Dungeon of Abyss!
Continue your endless search, for a moment, of bliss...

-Yuki Usagi  

[Isis375]

First, I want to say, WELCOME!

We're happy to have you! Well, at least, I am. XD

I really like what you've posted so far. I like Dungeon of Abyss better though.

I like your use of punctuation to help the reader focuses on the rhythm. Not all people do that, and the reader can get confused or lose the flow, ya know? Speaking of flow, it all works together.

And I like that you like to write dark poems. I do, too. It's easier that way, at least for me. I write better when I'm depressed, or angry, or passionate, ya know? And the dark is more interesting, too.  

[Yukiko8]

Ah, well said...I left this particular poem open-ended so the reader could fill it in with imagination...I hope you respect my wishes of doing so.

"Too Good, To Be True...."

'I was skeptical, you were not.
I'm very alive, but in the ground you rot.

A very gloomy day, "your too gullible" I said.
I tried so hard, yet now, your dead.

You gave into antics, when I turned away.
Now your not here, to see the brilliance of this day.

Question everything, like the carnage to be.
I tried my best, to make you see.

Trust no one, and hide yourself away.
You might just live, to see another day.'  

[Yukiko8]

I personally dislike this one a lot...but, here it goes.

~~The Ocean~~

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'The ocean so vast, how long, will this moment last?
I gaze miles around, there's barely a sound.

It's dyed a deep blue. Is it sad? If only I knew.
In my place, you can also see the beach.
It's just a few meters away from my reach.

Crabs scatter for cover, as the ocean waves break.
Some grainles of sand, back to the depths, they take.

It's beauty unfair!! It sways without a care!!!!
It puts me in a trance, around my thoughts prance.


But
Then I Wake Up,
It
Was just a good dream,
For Once
This time, one that didn't make me scream.......'  

[Isis375]

Well, actually, I like The Ocean. I know what you mean, though. I've written a few things myself that I don't like, looking back. Like I've said before, I really like how you make the pauses certain, so the reader knows how to read it to get the best effect. ^^

I like how you describe the ocean. Like, you're just a voyeur, looking out at it, certain things catching your eye, others not. It makes it seem peaceful, although the person isn't even sure himself whether the view should be sad or not.

I do so love twists, even the smallest ones, in poems. The 'it's not always what it seems' aspect always interests me for some reason. I like how it's a dream, not reality, but I like more that the reader is informed that the person is normally troubled by nightmares. It makes me wonder for a moment what the person's dreams usually entail.

I like what I've read of your work so far. Can't wait till you post some more up. And thanks for visiting and commenting mine, not many people do. XD  

[Yukiko8]

This poem was inspired by pure inactivity, the overwhelming part of boredom. mrgreen Enjoy!

-PoeTRY~

'Emotions flare!! You see a blank page.
Inside your head, countless wars rage.

Something is growing, an idea!! That's it!!
It's happened so fast. A lightbulbs' been lit!!!

Light, and Dark...Inside your head.
No discussing, debating...It's all been said!!

Something New!!! It's near your grasp---!!!
Suddenly...it vanishes, a disappointed gasp.

Just give it time!! It shall return!!
Once again!! The fire will burn!!!'

7 minutes!!! A new personal record!!!  

[Isis375]

hehe I LIKE THAT!

That's how my mind works a lot when I write. Actually, that's how my mind works most of the time. I lose so many thoughts...hehe

Great inspiration for a poem, though! Colorful, too. Makes me smile. whee  

[Yukiko8]

It's hard to keep track of everything...I have some poems just in my book, and some poems just on the computer. The same goes with completed and incomplete. stressed  

[Yukiko8]

'Minion'

The stench, of rotting flesh lingers.
I roll around, some charred object, in my decrepit fingers.

The lights fade away, now it looks more like day...
The new light brings, a blissful view of decay.

I gaze around, all lay still.
Nothing left...nothing to kill.

All lay charred, and black, lost to time.
What once was great...was once, sublime.....

Nothing left, Oblivion's mark.
A town so diserving? All was a lark.

It's time to move on, this was written in stone.
It's time to move on, in the pages of time...it was sown.  

[Yukiko8]

'-Deception-'

Look around you, all the people you know.
Just like you, they're putting on a show.

Consealing the truth, putting up walls.
Look about you, hide all the flaws.

The more you know them, the less you do.
Give this some thought, think it through.

This isn't about being vain.
This isn't about being sane.

Continue this I warn you, you'll soon fall out of place.
We'll look down apon you, what a disgrace.

Continue this, you'll soon lose your crown.
After that, your sure to drown.  

[RynCrow09]

*is blown away* you have immense talent. Something you can always be proud of. I have one teeny problem...hehe sweatdrop your spelling errors. It's nothing real major, but still that's the only problem I can see. Like I said you have much talent and I commend you for it. Brava Yukiko8! Brava!  

[Yukiko8]

I thought it would be cool to capture a real event in my poem (If I haven't before confused )

Host=Red Complainer=Blue

"Enough of this boast, Let's start the Toast!!!"

"Enough of this boast! Let's start the toast!
Let's begin this meeting, this event at hand!
Are you all afraid, of the wine being bland!?"

"Come down sir! I was about to begin...
Publicity is un-wanted, I find it a sin."

"Let's make way! Not waste away the day!
If he get's his say, we'll all begin to decay!!!"

"Leave this place now!! You're a waste of my air!
Your startling all the guests, with these accusations you blare!!!"

What a pity, what a shame...I still believe, the host is to blame.