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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 5:35 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 18, 2008 8:24 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 6:51 am
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Posted: Tue Feb 19, 2008 10:08 pm
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KirbyVictorious a) What's an Ender? b) (he's in love with her) wow. Bit of an anticlimax. You'll have to be careful, people can't fall in love that fast, especially kids. No hormones then, remember? c) This sounds in-tense. Are they destined to end the war? do they? d) One thing you must always remember: don't ask someone's permission to write a story. you are the writer, you write what you damn well please. You can ask our opinions, but don't judge based on that. We'll read it and critique it if you write it, and be none the wiser if you don't. All in all, I like this idea. What kind of world is it set in? What kind of weapons do they use? Can they use magic? I am intrigued.
a) ender is a clan ( i was looking at a body was bottle in the shower and it had the ender in the name)
b) maybe i forgot to tell you this but it happens over a period of time like a year or two
c) i really have do idea, because this is a dream and i woke up before it was complety over
d) well i have nothing to say to that lol
What kind of world is it set in? ummmmm dunno What kind of weapons do they use? humans: guns and stuff ender: magic Can they use magic? yes
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Posted: Wed Feb 20, 2008 12:56 pm
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Posted: Wed Feb 20, 2008 3:48 pm
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Posted: Thu Feb 21, 2008 5:29 pm
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Posted: Fri Feb 22, 2008 4:08 pm
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Posted: Sat Feb 23, 2008 7:46 pm
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Posted: Mon Feb 25, 2008 4:08 pm
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that's a good point about the loan, BUT you should really write it whether it gets published or not. i mean, you should write because you are inspired, not because you want to be published.
you should write it. it's a good idea, but write it well. i won't go crazy on your grammar or anything, but it is something to work on. i won't say that this guild is full of grammar Nazis or anything, but it IS a writing guild, and we appreciate good grammar and usage.
don't take it personally, but when you post here, using shorthand like "ppl" instead of "people" shows (me) that you're too busy to write out the word, and thus perhaps you're too busy to care all that much about what you write here. if you actually need help with grammar or would like for someone to look it over, i can do that for you.
but i really think this is a cool idea. so go write.
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Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 6:23 pm
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KirbyVictorious a) What's an Ender? b) (he's in love with her) wow. Bit of an anticlimax. You'll have to be careful, people can't fall in love that fast, especially kids. No hormones then, remember? c) This sounds in-tense. Are they destined to end the war? do they? d) One thing you must always remember: don't ask someone's permission to write a story. you are the writer, you write what you damn well please. You can ask our opinions, but don't judge based on that. We'll read it and critique it if you write it, and be none the wiser if you don't. All in all, I like this idea. What kind of world is it set in? What kind of weapons do they use? Can they use magic? I am intrigued.
What makes you think there can't be love without hormones? What is love exactally and what gives you authority to say where it can and cannot flower?
(also 14 and 13 are about when hormone flux is strongest in boys, and I think girls mature faster with their hormones kicking in around 11)
You can do whatever you want in a story you just have to be sure to explain any deviations from what is expected out of something, but really you just need to mention that you yourself see it as strang, or that others in that world do too, and that will be that. Unless of course the world was geared with different mechanics, in which case it is useful to make comparisons to our humans, just to put things in perspective, but not neccessary.
[psst kirbs if he didn't want judgment to learn from then why would he ask our opinions in the first place? for that matter why would he put any completed work in the public realm? To be praised? no. He would post his work so that he could find out what others thought of his work and maybe he might choose to listen and grow from the suggestion of his fellow writers] Silly ^_^
[and I don't mean to be a grammar nazi but the word "their" implies possession, they're is the conjunction of they and are, and there implies a place - now worries though, I didn't learn that till tenth grade when my teacher pointed it out for me.]
[You should also work on your transitions...but then again that's something that comes with time, so you should just stay the course, I agree with kirbs on one thing: If you want to write something you should, you don't need our permission.
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Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 6:24 pm
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Posted: Tue Feb 26, 2008 6:37 pm
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in the flicker. that's a good point about the loan, BUT you should really write it whether it gets published or not. i mean, you should write because you are inspired, not because you want to be published.
that is by far the coolest thing I have ever heard anyone say on here...though that might be the cold talking
in the flicker. you should write it. it's a good idea, but write it well. i won't go crazy on your grammar or anything, but it is something to work on. i won't say that this guild is full of grammar Nazis or anything, but it IS a writing guild, and we appreciate good grammar and usage.
In other words: we preffer grammar ninjas.
in the flicker. don't take it personally, but when you post here, using shorthand like "ppl" instead of "people" shows (me) that you're too busy to write out the word, and thus perhaps you're too busy to care all that much about what you write here. if you actually need help with grammar or would like for someone to look it over, i can do that for you.
"ppl" actually takes me longer to type then "peaple" does.
in the flicker. but i really think this is a cool idea. so go write.
Heh sorry, again that all may be the cold talking which has turned me slightly dazed.
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