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Chieftain Twilight Captain
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 Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 12:12 pm
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 6:46 pm
I'm not really in to hip hop, but I do like it.
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 8:38 pm
I like it too. It flows really well. I'd like to read more of your stuff.
Also... I disagree
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 8:48 pm
I made my comments on DA.
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ScarletFrost Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Dec 15, 2010 8:49 pm
It's okay. I have heard better, and worse~
Personally Hip Hop kinda hurts me~ On the inside. O.O
But other than that: It is okay! biggrin
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Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 2:12 pm
I've gotten mixed responces about the flow... ironically, someone told me that it seems like I was focusing more on the Rhyming than the Rythm, which was upsetting... I was realy hoping to make it more Beatnik meets Haiku in Hip-Hop form...
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Chieftain Twilight Captain
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Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 2:50 pm
I'm not really into hip-hop, so I probably am not the best judge...
...but when I read it, I can hear the rhythm, and I think it flows rather well...
...as a musician, I know everyone has their own inner rhythms though, and without actually having an auditory example of it, we will apply the rhythms we would automatically associate to the meter of the words.
I would love to actually hear it the way you envision it.
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Posted: Thu Dec 16, 2010 2:52 pm
I hope t get it done soon, but the reality is I have to wait a while to get a Computer and teh Program I need.
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Chieftain Twilight Captain
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