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 Posted: Sun Mar 26, 2006 10:25 pm
Ok, I'm not the greatest artist but I'm decent. I enjoy drawing and I run an awsome rp guild full of very nice and fun people. So I decided to start a manga based loosley around the story and characters in the guild. It takes place in the naruto universe, although sometime afterwards so as not to interfere with the growing story of Naruto. Friendly comments are appreciated, I know I made some mistakes here and there but I'm only human and as I said I'm only decent at drawing. I hope that this experience of drawing manga will make me a better artist overall by exercising my skills. 
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Posted: Sun Mar 26, 2006 11:32 pm
Ok, I already know about a few problems I need to fix so I'll point them out so others won't repetedly remind me.
One: In the bottom right frame he says "There" instead of "Thier" and in the bottom right the guy has no eye color and his mouth is skin tone. My bad, easy fixes though.
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Posted: Mon Mar 27, 2006 8:56 am
hehe, looks like u have an interesting plot there! I can't wait to see the rest of this! mrgreen Ur comic has mistakes in it mostly in the drawing but the paneling is good(not that I'm good at it) I'm sure u'll get better! 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Mar 27, 2006 10:26 am
rika_arena hehe, looks like u have an interesting plot there! I can't wait to see the rest of this! mrgreen Ur comic has mistakes in it mostly in the drawing but the paneling is good(not that I'm good at it) I'm sure u'll get better! 3nodding Yep, thats why I wasn't cocky with it. It's manga though so the art is rushed so I can try and get it out on a regular basis, not like a normal pic in which I can spend months on. *shrugs* Thanks for the comment though. Overall I'm more concerned with the story than the art. Since that will in the end be more important and hook more readers.
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Posted: Mon Mar 27, 2006 3:13 pm
Just a few minor things that I'd like to bring up: The style of border is very busy and distracting. I think it could do without all of the red dots around it. Also, having "SFX:" and writing the sound word outside of the box seems silly. It should either be inside the panel near what is making the noise, or left out completely. Also, the SFX note could be done without.
Also you could save some space on these, the gutter is huge. I would reduce the space around the panels a little, and the space between them a lot.
As for the drawings themselves, in the last two panels the necks are very big, the first one bigger than the head itself. You also seem to be drawing the lines on the neck without really knowing why they are there. Do you know what you are representing, or only drawing it because you see it done in manga? This is an important thing to consider. Anime is an abstraction of reality, you should know enough about real people that you know what each line is representing. If you don't understand what it is that you are drawing, it is hard to draw it correctly.
Anyway, good luck with your comic! Don't be discouraged by mistakes, we're all learning. =3
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 8:15 am
I understand anatomy just fine. I've completed 3 biology classes in my college. The longer line on the side is the outer turning point of the wind pipe, which is generally visible in shades or should the muscles in the neck tighten do to stress, anger, etc. The other smaller bump is the adams apple... I know my anatomy enough to know what I'm drawing, but this above is still going through editing, plus when I photo shop it the lines tend to move when you connect them or if you try to re-edit them do to an unsteady line (which happens often)... soooo... yeah.
Oh and yeah, I noticed the neck was too long on the Kage when I looked it over... one of those things you just kinda don't notice until after the fact. xp
Anywho, I'm practicing still so meh.
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 11:05 am
Dark Bunny Lord I understand anatomy just fine. I've completed 3 biology classes in my college. Just because you took some biology classes doesn't mean you fully understand human anatomy and how to apply it to your art.  Just a quick draw-over to illustrate some of my points about the neck. I changed the shoulder position a little because I can't figure out what you're trying to do with that. Also, to point out that the eyes are very high up on the character. Your drawings could probably benifit from the use of underdrawing. True, the neck drawn here is more realistic, and of course in anime it can be made thinner. Don't feel that you have to defend yourself when someone says something you don't want to hear. Just read and consider it. This isn't the "Anime come tell be how great I am place" it's the "Anime Art Academy. There will be positive and negatice crits designed to help you improve, so take them all in stride.
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Posted: Wed Mar 29, 2006 12:11 pm
I wasn't offended, sorry if I sounded angry or anything.
Besides, as I said, I'm still learning.
Just as well that anime's not exactly realistic as you said, using perfect anatomy is... well... not always feesable, nor does any person in real life actually have the same build. There are plenty of animes where characters far from fit the norm of human anotomy... with there big ol eyes... and sometimes even with attachments that should cause serious back problems lol.
Anyways I've kinda abandoned the idea of me doing the manga on myself after taking a long hard look at it.
Instead I started a thread to recruit other artists to pool there talent together to create this manga. I'd run story, and whatever else I could help with while I'd need several others to do the drawings, coloring, etc (seperating the jobs of each amoung several people if needs be)
Payment is still trying to be figured out though, I'm not rich so I can't really pay gold wise and pure cash is a bit out of the question as I'm barely able to pay for insurance, college, and rent...
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