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[~Lam~]

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 6:25 pm


It's been a while since I posted here..

>.< Well, my art anyway.. Darn scanner.. I had to use digital camera..
Sorry for the poor quality..

I haven't gotten to drawing for some time, darn need of good grades.. (actually, it's not that bad)

Anyway. Please do not steal these pictures, they are my characters from my Manga that I will be working on over the summer.. (that is if I can learn all the informations within a few months..)

Please Critique, Arigatoo..

- [~Lam~]

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Dialogue in the text (this was a St. Patrick's Day joke I made with two of my manga characters..

Boy: SERENA, STOP PINCHING ME!
Girl: No can do you're not wearing green!
(in smaller text.) Serena is wearing a green bow. Ironically, Jung (the boy) has green eyes....

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This is Zhen from my manga, of course, I do know of the proportional errors as well as errors with my lining.. >.>

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Like I said, I had to use a digital camera, please ignore my cell phone.. redface


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Zhen and the main guy character.. ^.^ Don't they look cute together?
Yes, I am very aware of the proportional and positional problems in this..

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Zhen really angry. ^.^ Though she doesn't seem that.. >.> Probably moderately..


Once more, please post comments and Crits here..
PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 9:30 pm


@_@~! Even if you resized them MAKE THEM ALL SMALLER X(~!!!!! I can't see ANY of the pics! (plus, for ppl who have limited memory space is is very inconvenient)

It's hard to see all them, but critique? Mm...

1.) THEIR NECKS (are very long). Especially Jun. For some reason, his neck is like melted into his shoulder. Either move his shoulder up of move his head (and neck) down.

2.) I can't say anything else since I can't seem them very well (please please PLEASE shrink pictures if you want any helpful critiques)

Okiyami


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PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 10:38 pm


(Sorry about the size issue, it has been fixed. Thanks for telling me)

Thanks Okiyama for the comments, I see where you're pointing at with the necks, I'll be sure to keep that in mind..
PostPosted: Fri Mar 31, 2006 11:01 pm


^_^ Ah hah! Fixed! Ok, now for some real comments.

1.) The Anatomy is overall ok except for the first picture (the one with Jun and... Serena?). Jun's overall chest and torso seem too short, which in turn affects where his arms and legs are placed.

2.) I love the position of Zhen and... (main guy character). It's actually pretty good (Me, I suck when it comes to two people together and stuff) Advcie-- his hand seems a little skinny (the left one)

3.) Yes! We all love dragons ^_^. The curve looks a little off at the very end, but it just takes a good eraser and pencil to fix that....

and that's it! Thank you for shrinking the pics ^^ I know its kinda hard to shrink them, upload them and repost them... gomen

Okiyami

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