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 Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 4:15 pm
http://i52.photobucket.com/albums/g37/Shisuta-Toshisita/JinandRobin.jpg
I guess I was practicing drawing wings and certain details in this... sorry if it looks weird. >< I made a bit of mistakes on the inking. <_< Quite a bit actually.
Anyway, I hope you like the lineart-ness. xD
http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/40730715/
Ok. This is the coloured version, with a crappy cheap background!!! Yay!!! o:... I got it done fast... xD And I did HORRIBLE on the colouring and I messed up allot... at least it's a bit less confusing to me and hopefully allot of people.
Hope everyone isn't too discusted. ^^
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 7:34 pm
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 9:09 pm
This is a slow forum. Give it time.
Your pic is very good. I see no immidiate problems.
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Posted: Sat Sep 30, 2006 10:26 pm
Wow eek I love the wings. And those details are awesome!!!
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 12:30 am
I love the wings..! :3 and the details are really amazing. You must have put in a LOT of effort into this. o_o hope to see more from you biggrin
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 1:45 am
The detail is superb as is the anatomy. You're style reminds me of Clamp's
xxxHolic, which I mean as a compliment.
My only suggestion is that you vary the thickness of some lines, just to bring it alive a little more.
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 2:51 pm
I love the details you put into this!
The only thing that bothers me is the girl's fishnet leg/foot, it looks painfully twisted to the side. But maybe I'm looking at it at the wrong angle...
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 4:35 pm
Its really quite good. But i would also work a bit more on your anatomy. Also I think the dudes face it a bit lopsided for the way he's looking. The detail is great though and it looks meaningfil. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!! mrgreen
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 5:09 pm
I appreciate the amazing details of the wings but here is some constructive criticism:
Focus on what you want the viewer to be focusing on when they see the picture. Here is the order I see things:: the large wings, the boy's face, the girl's bag-thing, their legs (which is hard for me to tell it due to it being lineart and all)
If you want the focus to be the wings, then you've achieved it. The amazing detail in the wings and the lineart-lack of detail in the people cause the wings to really stand out. Of course, when you colour, you can create as much detail as you want in your characters.
If you want the characters to be the focus, you can tone out the wings by using a solid color with shallow shadowing or no shadowing, if they're glowing.
Also, the boy's face (which was already mentioned) is a little lopsided compared to his chin and cheeks. Also, the anatomic proportions of the eye make the eyes a little two close together...
BUT! That last comment is something you obviously can't fix, so ignore me. That first part is all about coloring ^w^
But, I'm just rambling here. Don't listen to me if you don't want to. Besides, ITS JUST AN AWESOME PICTURE DUE TO DETAIL! GREAT JOB!
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Posted: Sun Oct 01, 2006 8:48 pm
Great manga style! However, it's so cluttered..I'm not sure what I'm looking at! I had trouble trying to find the rest of the boy's body including the arm holding the girl. Be careful what you do with details. Good doesn't equal overly drawn. The wings ARE beautiful, but the overly busy design of the clothes take away from the picture because..as I said..you eyes get lost and it becomes confusing.
The girl's hair is beautiful...great detail in the curls..which can be hard to do! The wings, of course, are gorgeous..BUT..there is one major thing that takes away from this drawing: The girl's skirt.
Were you trying to do crimps? Because it came out looking like someone julianned the hem and makes the wrinkles of the skirt look misplaced. Also..I'm not sure what that sheet of detail under the skirt is....is it another skirt? A transparent piece of material?
Another thing that I noticed immediatley was the placement of the girl's right foot. With how she's being held..her foot can NOT bend that way unless she's been in some sort of accident @__@. The foot is turned wayyy to far over. I'd try and fix that.
Another thing I noticed right away was the placement of the boy's mouth and eyes. The mouth is completely crooked while the eyes take up most of the upper half of his face. This is only further emphasized by the eyebrows, which are too thin and too close together.
What do I suggest? Be careful what you do with detail! And make sure you double check anatomy before you make things into line art and ink them.
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Posted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 12:57 am
OMG! I need to get on gaia more often. <_<; Anyway to business!*starting from the botton*
@Garkudion@ Lol. Yesh, it is quite cluttered... xD It's not necessarily Manga style though... I'm not good at drawing Manga... <_<; one of those really horrible colour artist. xD I'm sorry the pic is all confusing... it confused me when I coloured it in U_U .
I tryed to make it look a bit more folded from some of it being caught in the guy's arm... unfortuately I DID go line happy... And yesh, the other thing is a transparent dress thing. >< It's not very good... you can tell I haven't done it often... xD
The girls foot... Yeah... I did mess that up too. ^^ I would try to fix it... but I don't have the tools or the patients to completely start over... With the guys mouth... it's supposed to be a bit slanted... it's kind of super "this can't happen in real life physically" Anime emotion thing... I DO have to admit... his eyes very much bug me too... xD Actually I completely hate this drawing just because I f**ked up on his eye size. <_<; I like the eyebrows though... I'm not a fan of drawing normal eyebrows... just enough to show emotion. xD
Thank you for your art knowledge(sp)!!!!! *hug-ehs* I'll keep doing detail just for what I said... I'm a colour artist... xD I can't do crap without colour... I will work on anatomy! >< That will always be( other than learning how to do backgrounds) to be decent at anatomy.
3nodding
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Posted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 1:08 am
@Okiyami@ Focus on what the person to see? O_o But... wouldn't I be doing that now? I mean I'm showing you something I want everyone to see... and what do you mean by a bag thing? xD *is obviously confused*
Yeah... xD I'm not good at doing ALLOT of detail to everything... >< I already had trouble colouring it in because it was confusing... but... I like over detailing wings, it's quite fun. ^^ Very hard in my case... but fun. I tryed the colour shadowing thing... >< it doesn't work with my markers. xD And only "fake" wings glow in my story... head... thing. ^^
Yesh... Like I said to the one dude. I agree... his face is weird... well... just the eyes... mainly his mouth throws off why it looks lopsided. xD Othere than that his eyes are annoyingly oversized.*nods*
Lol. xD I listen to everyones comments... it's good learning. Thank you for your comment now!! ^^ *huggeth*
@LacklePock01@ Lol... Your name is fun to say. xD Anyway. I am working on anatomy... I know... I suck big time at anatomy. And yesh... it does seem lopsided... the mouth throws it off quite a bit. xD His mouth is all crooked(sp) and super Anime like.
Thank you for you comment LacklePock01 person!!!! ^^ *hug-ehs*
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Posted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 1:15 am
@schzoid_baka@ Yesh. The leg is very off... xD I should claim that she's been in a horrible accident and twisted her leg... but that wouldn't pass as an actual thing that would work for... her.^^ Thank you for you comment!!! *hugs*
@Soul_Syryn@ Really? O_o That's interesting. xD
I've tryed doing that... it never works with my pen. crying My pen hates me along with my markers. xD How would Line thickness bring out Life anyway? O_o *is curious*
@amakakeru@ Aww!!! Thank you person!!! ^^ Not really... xD I would have done ALLOT better with less flaws. Thank you for wanting to see more of my crap art!!! ^.^ *huggeth*
@Nelesia@ Thank you person!!!! ^^ heart *hug-ehs!*
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Posted: Mon Oct 02, 2006 1:17 am
Unpolished This is a slow forum. Give it time. Your pic is very good. I see no immidiate problems. Sorry about that... I'm a bit of the impatient type... xD *bows respectfully* Wow! Really? O_o Kewl!!! ^^ Thank you!!
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Posted: Mon Oct 09, 2006 9:56 am
Hi, could I color it? I would really like to! It's a beautiful drawing!
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